Some of the main problems I had with this piece was to find the right quotes. There were times where it was hard to find the right thing to say, but when I found the right quote everything came together. Another issue was deciding on where I stood in the essay. The prompt was whether college was right for everyone. I completed for the longest time on where I stood. I eventually figured it out and choice. Figuring out how to incorporate a Barclay style paragraph into the essay was difficult, but by using the right quotes I think it went well. I chose my second essay, because I thought it showed how well improved from the first one. I think it had a much stronger beginning, middle, and end. Furthermore, I’d say the strongest part in the essay was on page 3 and it’s the last paragraph. Not only but, other places like expansion was key. There were parts in the essay in the draft stage, where I couldn’t figure out enough to say on certain topics. However, I realized that by using my voice and fully explaining some points, it made things work out just fine in the final draft.
